Blurbage

As an aide to writing the inevitable Dreaded Query Letter, I’ve been trying to come up with a concise-yet-interesting description of the plot of A Theft of Bones (that’s the working title of my WIP).  So far, I have this:

The day college freshman Andrew Mackay is attacked in the woods by an undead creature turns out to be one of the luckiest days of his life.  That attack brings him to the attention of the Guardian Order,  the law enforcement arm of magical society.  No sooner has Andrew started training to become a Guardian than he and his new friends are confronted with a puzzling series of grave robberies where someone is using daimons to reanimate the dead.  The signs eventually point to the Children of the Emim, a fringe group of magicians that most people have written off as a bunch of cranks.  Now Andrew and his fellow Guardians must discover if the Children are as harmless as they seem, or if there might be a sinister truth behind their strange lore.

How does it sound?  If you saw this blurb on a book cover, would it pique your interest enough to buy it?